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Monday, 8 February 2010
Sunday, 7 February 2010
Friday, 5 February 2010
Final Reflection
I feel that this project has been a good experience and that I have learnt a lot, especially from the mistakes we have made throughout. I haven't really had the chance before, to work like this, without any guidance from teachers. As a whole we have worked well, but there are a lot of things that I need to take in to account in the future to improve on. We needed to listen to each other a lot more, which would have meant having a daily meeting at the beginning of each day so we knew who was doing what, when. I think that we would have also benefited from swapping roles on each episode so that we had a different director and editing team. I think that a lot of our problems came from people being over-powered and not being able to get their thoughts across to the rest of the production team.
Our series has a lot of bad points and good points but I think that if I had planned a lot better at the beginning and got everyone's input, then they would have gone a lot better. Two out of three of our episodes were not aired on the set deadlines and in the real media industry this would have not be acceptable and we would have lost the job. I think that a lot of us needed to take the project a lot more seriously so that we would try get everything done, in any way we thought possible. Instead of this, things were just done when we thought it would be able to, I think that we could have tried a lot harder to make deadlines.
Deadlines were mainly unmet because of not getting the shoot finished in enough time and I think this was all down to planning. Our female actress was only able to shoot on Thursdays and as we knew this from the beginning, we then should have found a different actress who could shoot on more days or just not have a female character. As for the rest of the cast, they were all members of our class and they could pretty much shoot when ever we were free. If we had researched our actors/actress to start of with, we would have been able to get a lot more shooting time and therefore met all deadlines efficiently.
I think that the idea of showing our work online was a really good idea and it lets the whole world see what we have created. I decided which social networking sites that we wanted to use and we needed to display all of our videos on YouTube and Vimeo. Our chosen social networking site was Facebook, as it is very popular and it would be really easy for us to get a lot of fans and a lot of views. This was another step for us, as normally we would just upload our videos to the diploma's YouTube site and not a lot of people outside of Long Road would get to see it. However, this way we could get a lot of feedback, get a lot of people interested and it was amazing that so many people agreed to be fans of it.
I think that this has also had a down side, as there a lot of others doing the same thing all over the internet, we weren't really being original and there wasn't really a way of us standing out from the crowd. I think that if we had a bigger budget so we could make out own website, that may have helped to widen our audience and popularity but it still isn't enough. The world we now live in today, allows anyone, anywhere to show any pieces of their work pretty much anywhere. This means that you have to create something out of the ordinary, something of great quality or you have to know the right people. It isn't as easy anymore to get into the industry with a simple piece of work that you have created.
At the beginning of the project we researched a few other webseries and analyzed them. I think that in terms of webseries, our storyline is quite original and I haven't yet found something similar. A lot of the webseries, such as 'The Guild' focus their audience to teens and young adults and use them within in their series. This where we are similar because we thought that this would be the easier audience to target because we know what they would be interested in. This is also made the comedy a lot easier, as we know what kinda of comedy is humorous to our age range. 'The Guild' seems to focus on a certain stereotype in our age group, which we would call 'computer nerds', as their series is about an online game.
I have decided to random select one of their episodes and try to compare it with one of our episodes. I think that this could help us to see some faults and see how we would have improved, if were to have made another episode.
I have decided to watch Season 3 - Episode 1:Expansion Time. Below is the episode. . .
This episode is slightly different to all of the others that I have seen of theirs. Most of their other episodes are mainly of each of the character on their computers, in their virtual world. However, in this episode, they are shown lining up outside a store waiting for it to open so that they can buy the latest version of their game. This was a good twist from the normal episodes and it made it a lot more interesting to them just being sat in front of the camera the whole time. We decide to use this idea for our first episode, in a smaller scale, as we used a flash back to one of the characters getting injured. Most people thought this was the best part of the first episode as it was the most entertaining part. I think that we could have got away with putting a flash back in each episode to make it more interesting.
Their website is the image similar to the one I had in my head for our series. I think that we would have benefited from making something similar to that. Produce t-shirts that others can buy, our videos down the side in a toolbar and the most recent video being displayed as the first thing you see and also links to all the sites that we use. Their website is a brilliant way to promote their series and I think that has really contributed to getting them popular.
The internet has helped a lot of people get heard by others and allowed them to be creative in the way they want to. It is has opened a lot of windows to everyone and a world of possibilities. There aren't many people in the world now who do not have access to a computer or the internet and this helped a lot of people.
When looking at creative practitioners, you hardly see any that have become popular by producing their work on the internet. Most of the practitioners that we inspire to be, have been in the industry a long time and worked their way in from the bottom and got to the top. Not many can say that they have done that by just getting big number of hits on YouTube. Yes, they may be popular to some parts of the world but there isn't much prophet that comes from it. Popularity on the internet is more for creative work that is made for a hobby or in spare time. The prophet on the internet is low now, as people can do pretty much anything and it isn't a bad thing if that is what you are looking for.
In our case, it was really useful, we have learnt a lot from the experience and it has shown us a lot we can improve in the future. We should use the internet to stream our work cause there is always someone out there who is interested and it will help us to improve our next piece of work. We can get feedback almost instantly, a large number of views in minutes and we can change our episodes according to this. We are able to change our next episode, in response to how our audience reacts to the previous episode. This method of showing our work, in some ways, is much great in getting popular responses than say a tv show that they would have made over a long period of time and then aired after.
As for our team work, we have learnt a lot there too and it will help us when we are in the industry, how we should work with people to get a job done efficiently. Knowing how to work in a group so that deadlines are met is very important and we know what is needed to make a production work. I think that it is a lot easier to get an online series working and we have only had a smaller taster of what it would actually be like.
Our series has a lot of bad points and good points but I think that if I had planned a lot better at the beginning and got everyone's input, then they would have gone a lot better. Two out of three of our episodes were not aired on the set deadlines and in the real media industry this would have not be acceptable and we would have lost the job. I think that a lot of us needed to take the project a lot more seriously so that we would try get everything done, in any way we thought possible. Instead of this, things were just done when we thought it would be able to, I think that we could have tried a lot harder to make deadlines.
Deadlines were mainly unmet because of not getting the shoot finished in enough time and I think this was all down to planning. Our female actress was only able to shoot on Thursdays and as we knew this from the beginning, we then should have found a different actress who could shoot on more days or just not have a female character. As for the rest of the cast, they were all members of our class and they could pretty much shoot when ever we were free. If we had researched our actors/actress to start of with, we would have been able to get a lot more shooting time and therefore met all deadlines efficiently.
I think that the idea of showing our work online was a really good idea and it lets the whole world see what we have created. I decided which social networking sites that we wanted to use and we needed to display all of our videos on YouTube and Vimeo. Our chosen social networking site was Facebook, as it is very popular and it would be really easy for us to get a lot of fans and a lot of views. This was another step for us, as normally we would just upload our videos to the diploma's YouTube site and not a lot of people outside of Long Road would get to see it. However, this way we could get a lot of feedback, get a lot of people interested and it was amazing that so many people agreed to be fans of it.
I think that this has also had a down side, as there a lot of others doing the same thing all over the internet, we weren't really being original and there wasn't really a way of us standing out from the crowd. I think that if we had a bigger budget so we could make out own website, that may have helped to widen our audience and popularity but it still isn't enough. The world we now live in today, allows anyone, anywhere to show any pieces of their work pretty much anywhere. This means that you have to create something out of the ordinary, something of great quality or you have to know the right people. It isn't as easy anymore to get into the industry with a simple piece of work that you have created.
At the beginning of the project we researched a few other webseries and analyzed them. I think that in terms of webseries, our storyline is quite original and I haven't yet found something similar. A lot of the webseries, such as 'The Guild' focus their audience to teens and young adults and use them within in their series. This where we are similar because we thought that this would be the easier audience to target because we know what they would be interested in. This is also made the comedy a lot easier, as we know what kinda of comedy is humorous to our age range. 'The Guild' seems to focus on a certain stereotype in our age group, which we would call 'computer nerds', as their series is about an online game.
I have decided to random select one of their episodes and try to compare it with one of our episodes. I think that this could help us to see some faults and see how we would have improved, if were to have made another episode.
I have decided to watch Season 3 - Episode 1:Expansion Time. Below is the episode. . .
This episode is slightly different to all of the others that I have seen of theirs. Most of their other episodes are mainly of each of the character on their computers, in their virtual world. However, in this episode, they are shown lining up outside a store waiting for it to open so that they can buy the latest version of their game. This was a good twist from the normal episodes and it made it a lot more interesting to them just being sat in front of the camera the whole time. We decide to use this idea for our first episode, in a smaller scale, as we used a flash back to one of the characters getting injured. Most people thought this was the best part of the first episode as it was the most entertaining part. I think that we could have got away with putting a flash back in each episode to make it more interesting.
Their website is the image similar to the one I had in my head for our series. I think that we would have benefited from making something similar to that. Produce t-shirts that others can buy, our videos down the side in a toolbar and the most recent video being displayed as the first thing you see and also links to all the sites that we use. Their website is a brilliant way to promote their series and I think that has really contributed to getting them popular.
The internet has helped a lot of people get heard by others and allowed them to be creative in the way they want to. It is has opened a lot of windows to everyone and a world of possibilities. There aren't many people in the world now who do not have access to a computer or the internet and this helped a lot of people.
When looking at creative practitioners, you hardly see any that have become popular by producing their work on the internet. Most of the practitioners that we inspire to be, have been in the industry a long time and worked their way in from the bottom and got to the top. Not many can say that they have done that by just getting big number of hits on YouTube. Yes, they may be popular to some parts of the world but there isn't much prophet that comes from it. Popularity on the internet is more for creative work that is made for a hobby or in spare time. The prophet on the internet is low now, as people can do pretty much anything and it isn't a bad thing if that is what you are looking for.
In our case, it was really useful, we have learnt a lot from the experience and it has shown us a lot we can improve in the future. We should use the internet to stream our work cause there is always someone out there who is interested and it will help us to improve our next piece of work. We can get feedback almost instantly, a large number of views in minutes and we can change our episodes according to this. We are able to change our next episode, in response to how our audience reacts to the previous episode. This method of showing our work, in some ways, is much great in getting popular responses than say a tv show that they would have made over a long period of time and then aired after.
As for our team work, we have learnt a lot there too and it will help us when we are in the industry, how we should work with people to get a job done efficiently. Knowing how to work in a group so that deadlines are met is very important and we know what is needed to make a production work. I think that it is a lot easier to get an online series working and we have only had a smaller taster of what it would actually be like.
Interview with our Producer
I decided that it would be a good idea to interview our producer, Nick, about what he thought of the series that we have produced. James interviewed him and below are the questions and the answers.
Are you happy with the three episodes of the webseries we made for you?
"I am happy with the improved quality through the three series but I am very disappointed by the lack of keeping to deadlines. This would have caused a number of serious issues were this a commercial brief. The episodes were too long as well. The third episode was the right length."
After interviewing members of the audience, they said that they liked the second episodes length which was 4.30. They said that episode 3 was too short. What are your thoughts on that?
"I'm glad that the audience responded well to the length but I still believe that it could have been shorter. On television there's a specific slot for a series. If the slot was 30 minutes, the episode couldn't have been any longer. I suppose online it's different because you don't have the specific time gaps."
Do you like the idea of the series, the fact that it's in a detention room?
"I think the concept is very strong and I have been very excited by the idea from the beginning. I feel the first episode did not do justice to the concept but the last episode has a much stronger appeal."
What didn't you like about the series?
"The bad language and needless aggression in the first episode. I liked the fact that you changed the offensive language into more inventive expressions of rage for the other episodes."
What did you like about the series?
"The title sequence is very good, both in terms of genre conventions and technical ability. The whip cutting was very effective. I enjoyed the more surreal elements of the third episode as well."
What did you think of the characters, and the acting?
"I thought Matt Hornby's performance and character consistently amusing. The other acting improved over time."
We missed deadlines and the lengths of the episodes you weren't happy with either, but what could we have done better?
"Communicated better and looked out for each other more to ensure everything was completed to time and to a high enough standard."
If we made a fourth episode, what would you like us to include, and how would you like us to go about it?
"Continue in the slightly surreal, mighty-boosh like direction you have begun to take."
Are you happy with the three episodes of the webseries we made for you?
"I am happy with the improved quality through the three series but I am very disappointed by the lack of keeping to deadlines. This would have caused a number of serious issues were this a commercial brief. The episodes were too long as well. The third episode was the right length."
After interviewing members of the audience, they said that they liked the second episodes length which was 4.30. They said that episode 3 was too short. What are your thoughts on that?
"I'm glad that the audience responded well to the length but I still believe that it could have been shorter. On television there's a specific slot for a series. If the slot was 30 minutes, the episode couldn't have been any longer. I suppose online it's different because you don't have the specific time gaps."
Do you like the idea of the series, the fact that it's in a detention room?
"I think the concept is very strong and I have been very excited by the idea from the beginning. I feel the first episode did not do justice to the concept but the last episode has a much stronger appeal."
What didn't you like about the series?
"The bad language and needless aggression in the first episode. I liked the fact that you changed the offensive language into more inventive expressions of rage for the other episodes."
What did you like about the series?
"The title sequence is very good, both in terms of genre conventions and technical ability. The whip cutting was very effective. I enjoyed the more surreal elements of the third episode as well."
What did you think of the characters, and the acting?
"I thought Matt Hornby's performance and character consistently amusing. The other acting improved over time."
We missed deadlines and the lengths of the episodes you weren't happy with either, but what could we have done better?
"Communicated better and looked out for each other more to ensure everything was completed to time and to a high enough standard."
If we made a fourth episode, what would you like us to include, and how would you like us to go about it?
"Continue in the slightly surreal, mighty-boosh like direction you have begun to take."
Thursday, 4 February 2010
Focus Group of Viewers - Answers
What are you initial thoughts and feelings of the webseries?
"It was comedy, and it was one of those things that you could watch again because its not bad bad, but its kind of bad good. Like it knows its bad but it makes it good. Like with the editing and stuff."
"They developed, the characters, as it went on. I thought the 2nd episode was better than the 1st. and the 3rd one. There was a lot more comedy, and action to it."
"I think the girl should have been in it more because she was just there and she didn't really do anything."
"I think the first one focused more on development of the characters. Just introducing them separately and then the 2nd one had a story base. then the third one is just kind of random. It was just trippy and getting high for no apparent reason. until the end."
What do you think of the characters and their interactions?
"Josh's character, it might have been the shot type, but it just felt like he had been pasted in there."
"I really liked Keiths character, but the characters, I didn't really like the girls character but thats because she didn't really do much. My favourite characters keith and I liked sonny, and Pier. They're probably joint 2nd."
"You had a range of characters, and they weren't the same or anything which was good."
"and they were really different which was good."
Do you prefer the first second or third episode and why is that?
"The second one because it didn't have all the hassle of the first one. The third one was just abit confusing."
Do you think it worked though?
"I think the effect was to confuse the audience which worked but it was just a bit weird, and random, in terms of storyline."
So did you prefer the 2nd one?
"I prefered the 2nd one but I got what was happening in the 3rd one."
"I prefered the 2nd one. I think the thrid one was too short."
Was the episode structure for the 2nd and third episodes better than the 1st?
"It flowed better than the first one."
What do you think of the fan page on facebook?
"I havent seen a lot of it so far but from what I have seen I think it's good. I like the idea of posting things from the characters perspectives."
'I like the fan page, its quite simple but effective. It does keep it interesting, like you said about the characters posting things. Just keeps the background story going for the webseries."
The target audience was people our age. 16-21. do you think facebook is a good place for a fan page?
'Yes definatly."
Do you all have facebook?
"Yes"
What do you think could be improved for the next episode if we made one?
"Development of the second."
"I think you should cut out the swearing because it just like a beep a minute. I know it was just in the first one but it was just like beep after beep."
"I'd quite like the same setting as the second one. Different storyline, different character."
"Maybe have one or two main characters and then rotate the other characters around. So you get to see the old characters, like the audience favourites, and then you get to see their new reactions with the new characters."
What are the good and bad points of the episodes?
"It was too long, and too much swearing. Good points was that it managed to establish a good base for the episode to start on. It wasn't too tiresome that you couldn't watch it again."
"I think the first one introduced the characters well. Too much swearing though, it was just beep beep beep."
"I think you focus the humour too much on Keith going crazy at the beginning. Apart from the frijj bit which was really funny. Good word play. There the two funny bits, you need to stretch the comedy out."
What about the second one?
"I really liked the second one. It was funny, it had a good story."
" I liked it too, and through out all three of the episodes the characters managed to stay the same which was good. Sometimes in television series the characters change. Their nice one time and then they're really horrible but your characters didn't change."
" Only bad point was when you looked at the camera and when the teachers at the door. But everytime I see that it makes me laugh."
What about the third one then?
"It was too short, I got the idea you were trying to create an element of confusion but it kind of gave it away a bit with the title so maybe something a little bit more cryptic could have worked better."
"I didn't like the teachers acting. She was smiling too much about the fact that theres been a gas leak."
Who is your favourite character?
"I'd have to say sonny, your character. It just made me laugh the way he kept hitting people. It was just one of those things I found hilarious."
"Little things please little minds."
"I just really liked your reactions."
"I liked Keith."
"I liked the one who kept trying to escape. Pier."
Did you think the acting was good?
"I think the acting was good for all the characters."
What did you think of vince as a character?
"It felt as if he was just stuck on there to fill screen time because he kind of just sat there and said something every now and then."
"I think hes one of those characters that doesn't really do or say much but hes a part of it. Make the whole thing whole."
What makes the webseries watchable?
"Humour, slapstick humour. Nonsense. Silly."
"The comedic stuff, and the way it was random, but good random."
"It was just really funny."
"It was comedy, and it was one of those things that you could watch again because its not bad bad, but its kind of bad good. Like it knows its bad but it makes it good. Like with the editing and stuff."
"They developed, the characters, as it went on. I thought the 2nd episode was better than the 1st. and the 3rd one. There was a lot more comedy, and action to it."
"I think the girl should have been in it more because she was just there and she didn't really do anything."
"I think the first one focused more on development of the characters. Just introducing them separately and then the 2nd one had a story base. then the third one is just kind of random. It was just trippy and getting high for no apparent reason. until the end."
What do you think of the characters and their interactions?
"Josh's character, it might have been the shot type, but it just felt like he had been pasted in there."
"I really liked Keiths character, but the characters, I didn't really like the girls character but thats because she didn't really do much. My favourite characters keith and I liked sonny, and Pier. They're probably joint 2nd."
"You had a range of characters, and they weren't the same or anything which was good."
"and they were really different which was good."
Do you prefer the first second or third episode and why is that?
"The second one because it didn't have all the hassle of the first one. The third one was just abit confusing."
Do you think it worked though?
"I think the effect was to confuse the audience which worked but it was just a bit weird, and random, in terms of storyline."
So did you prefer the 2nd one?
"I prefered the 2nd one but I got what was happening in the 3rd one."
"I prefered the 2nd one. I think the thrid one was too short."
Was the episode structure for the 2nd and third episodes better than the 1st?
"It flowed better than the first one."
What do you think of the fan page on facebook?
"I havent seen a lot of it so far but from what I have seen I think it's good. I like the idea of posting things from the characters perspectives."
'I like the fan page, its quite simple but effective. It does keep it interesting, like you said about the characters posting things. Just keeps the background story going for the webseries."
The target audience was people our age. 16-21. do you think facebook is a good place for a fan page?
'Yes definatly."
Do you all have facebook?
"Yes"
What do you think could be improved for the next episode if we made one?
"Development of the second."
"I think you should cut out the swearing because it just like a beep a minute. I know it was just in the first one but it was just like beep after beep."
"I'd quite like the same setting as the second one. Different storyline, different character."
"Maybe have one or two main characters and then rotate the other characters around. So you get to see the old characters, like the audience favourites, and then you get to see their new reactions with the new characters."
What are the good and bad points of the episodes?
"It was too long, and too much swearing. Good points was that it managed to establish a good base for the episode to start on. It wasn't too tiresome that you couldn't watch it again."
"I think the first one introduced the characters well. Too much swearing though, it was just beep beep beep."
"I think you focus the humour too much on Keith going crazy at the beginning. Apart from the frijj bit which was really funny. Good word play. There the two funny bits, you need to stretch the comedy out."
What about the second one?
"I really liked the second one. It was funny, it had a good story."
" I liked it too, and through out all three of the episodes the characters managed to stay the same which was good. Sometimes in television series the characters change. Their nice one time and then they're really horrible but your characters didn't change."
" Only bad point was when you looked at the camera and when the teachers at the door. But everytime I see that it makes me laugh."
What about the third one then?
"It was too short, I got the idea you were trying to create an element of confusion but it kind of gave it away a bit with the title so maybe something a little bit more cryptic could have worked better."
"I didn't like the teachers acting. She was smiling too much about the fact that theres been a gas leak."
Who is your favourite character?
"I'd have to say sonny, your character. It just made me laugh the way he kept hitting people. It was just one of those things I found hilarious."
"Little things please little minds."
"I just really liked your reactions."
"I liked Keith."
"I liked the one who kept trying to escape. Pier."
Did you think the acting was good?
"I think the acting was good for all the characters."
What did you think of vince as a character?
"It felt as if he was just stuck on there to fill screen time because he kind of just sat there and said something every now and then."
"I think hes one of those characters that doesn't really do or say much but hes a part of it. Make the whole thing whole."
What makes the webseries watchable?
"Humour, slapstick humour. Nonsense. Silly."
"The comedic stuff, and the way it was random, but good random."
"It was just really funny."
Focus Group of Viewers
Today we gathered together four random students from Long Road so that we could get together some outside feedback from other viewers. We decided that we would show them all each of the episodes that we produced and then we would ask them a series of questions about the online series that we have produced. Here are the questions that we decided to ask them.
1) What are your initial thoughts and feelings on the webseries?
2) What do you think of the characters and their interactions?
3) Do you prefer the 1st, 2nd or 3rd episode? and why is that?
4) Was changing the episode structure for the 2nd and 3rd episodes a good idea? was it better than the 1st episode?
5) Do you think the episode lengths are suitable for a webseries?
6) What do you think of the fan page? is facebook a suitable place for the fan page?
7) What do you think could be improved for the next episode if we made one?
8) What are the good and bad points of each episode?
9) Who is your favourite character?
10) What makes this webseries watchable?
We chose James to ask all the questions and then myself and Alex controlled two camera's that we were set up on either side of the room. Shooting it went really well, it looked really good from camera view but we did not use headphones so I am not too sure if the sound quality will be that good.
1) What are your initial thoughts and feelings on the webseries?
2) What do you think of the characters and their interactions?
3) Do you prefer the 1st, 2nd or 3rd episode? and why is that?
4) Was changing the episode structure for the 2nd and 3rd episodes a good idea? was it better than the 1st episode?
5) Do you think the episode lengths are suitable for a webseries?
6) What do you think of the fan page? is facebook a suitable place for the fan page?
7) What do you think could be improved for the next episode if we made one?
8) What are the good and bad points of each episode?
9) Who is your favourite character?
10) What makes this webseries watchable?
We chose James to ask all the questions and then myself and Alex controlled two camera's that we were set up on either side of the room. Shooting it went really well, it looked really good from camera view but we did not use headphones so I am not too sure if the sound quality will be that good.
Tuesday, 2 February 2010
Episode Two - Feedback and View Data
We have posted our second episode on to YouTube so that the public can view our episodes. Since 29th of January we have received 74 views on YouTube, from others watching our second episode. However, I was hoping for some comments and some things that people may want us to change about the episodes but these images show that we have had no comments.
Feedback for Episode Two
Here is the class feedback our group received from the rest of the class watching episode two of Detention Deficit:
Negative:
- Background sound needed at the start x3
- Dull
- Tries too hard to be funny, just makes it worse x2
- Keith totally unbelievable x2
- Not much story-line
- Continuity not good - Different rooms etc. x2
- Acting still poor x2
- Ignored advice for different actors
- Ending dull
- Mindless violence - Not needed x3
- Sound is fuzzy x3
- Episode is still too long
- Character Chris is unexplained x2
- Shot cut mid-sentence
- Hayden's character [Keith] is laughing in a shot - Out of character
- Shots of Hayden don't flow x2
- Hayden's character is 'just annoying'
- Close up of James doesn't work x5
- Nearly all of the shots are mid-shots, needs more variation
- The Trapped title is too short
- Over confident acting
- Last shot doesn't work as well as intended
- Didn't explain scene change
- Foot breaking not believable
- Amy could act better
- Sounds are a bit off at times x2
- Looked at the camera
- Teacher at the end is strange x2
- Spelling of character's names is inconsistent
- Character interactions are good
- Too long considering the 90 second rule x2
- Alexander/James scene too long
- "For who?" line too over reacted
- Foot break SFX was off
- Audio doesn't 'fit in'
- Script not quite tight enough, should be 'laugh every two seconds'
- Just kids being stupid
Positive:
- Title sequence good
- Chris is a good new character x2
- Matt's character [Vince] is awesome
- Improved episode length to last episode
- Better setting to last episode x2
- Alexander's character [Pier] is a lot better this time
- Cuts are good
- Good story-line
- Teacher seen at the door at the end, works well, adds to the comedy
- Better script to last episode x2
- Better camera work and cinematography x3
- No swearing makes it much better
- Fast and slow cuts
- More lines and interaction
- Better than episode one by far
- Acting is great x2
- Abusive terms are witty
- Colours on the wall are good
- Matt's acting is very good
- Editing was good with better fades and transitions
- False punch is good
Negative:
- Background sound needed at the start x3
- Dull
- Tries too hard to be funny, just makes it worse x2
- Keith totally unbelievable x2
- Not much story-line
- Continuity not good - Different rooms etc. x2
- Acting still poor x2
- Ignored advice for different actors
- Ending dull
- Mindless violence - Not needed x3
- Sound is fuzzy x3
- Episode is still too long
- Character Chris is unexplained x2
- Shot cut mid-sentence
- Hayden's character [Keith] is laughing in a shot - Out of character
- Shots of Hayden don't flow x2
- Hayden's character is 'just annoying'
- Close up of James doesn't work x5
- Nearly all of the shots are mid-shots, needs more variation
- The Trapped title is too short
- Over confident acting
- Last shot doesn't work as well as intended
- Didn't explain scene change
- Foot breaking not believable
- Amy could act better
- Sounds are a bit off at times x2
- Looked at the camera
- Teacher at the end is strange x2
- Spelling of character's names is inconsistent
- Character interactions are good
- Too long considering the 90 second rule x2
- Alexander/James scene too long
- "For who?" line too over reacted
- Foot break SFX was off
- Audio doesn't 'fit in'
- Script not quite tight enough, should be 'laugh every two seconds'
- Just kids being stupid
Positive:
- Title sequence good
- Chris is a good new character x2
- Matt's character [Vince] is awesome
- Improved episode length to last episode
- Better setting to last episode x2
- Alexander's character [Pier] is a lot better this time
- Cuts are good
- Good story-line
- Teacher seen at the door at the end, works well, adds to the comedy
- Better script to last episode x2
- Better camera work and cinematography x3
- No swearing makes it much better
- Fast and slow cuts
- More lines and interaction
- Better than episode one by far
- Acting is great x2
- Abusive terms are witty
- Colours on the wall are good
- Matt's acting is very good
- Editing was good with better fades and transitions
- False punch is good
Feedback From Episode Two
Here are some screen grabs from our Facebook fan page. We have also posted episode two on this page and this screen grab shows some of the feedback we received from people viewing episode two from Facebook.
Episode One - Feedback and Views Data
We have posted our first episode on to Vimeo so that the public can view our episodes. Since 22th of January we have received 183 views on Vimeo, from others watching our first episode. However, we were, again, hoping for some comments and some things that people may want us to change about the episodes but these images show that we have had no comments.
Feedback for Episode One
Here is the feedback that the rest of class gave us for the first episode of our webseries.
Positive:
Good Opening Sequence x 2
Good establishing shots x 2
Good sound track
Milk shake shot good
Confident Characters
Well acted in places x 3
Good range of shots
Negative:
Tried way to hard to be funny
Girl isn't good actor
James way too extreme
Sound level not the same
Out side shot - flashback - needs to be clearer
Shots when characters look into camera don't work
Music cuts too quick
Way too long x 2
Too much swearing x 3
Not bleeped properly x 3
Alex's character changes too much
Shots look studenty
Should close up on cans
Too angry
Flashback too repetitive
Nobody does detention in a computer room
Characters kinda dull
Credits too fast
Door scene does not make sense x 2
Pier isn't French enough
Too much fade out
Music too loud made them jump x 2
Unrealistic Characters
Positive:
Good Opening Sequence x 2
Good establishing shots x 2
Good sound track
Milk shake shot good
Confident Characters
Well acted in places x 3
Good range of shots
Negative:
Tried way to hard to be funny
Girl isn't good actor
James way too extreme
Sound level not the same
Out side shot - flashback - needs to be clearer
Shots when characters look into camera don't work
Music cuts too quick
Way too long x 2
Too much swearing x 3
Not bleeped properly x 3
Alex's character changes too much
Shots look studenty
Should close up on cans
Too angry
Flashback too repetitive
Nobody does detention in a computer room
Characters kinda dull
Credits too fast
Door scene does not make sense x 2
Pier isn't French enough
Too much fade out
Music too loud made them jump x 2
Unrealistic Characters
Feedback From Episode One
Here are some screen grabs from our Facebook fan page. We have posted each episode on this page and these screen grabs show some of the feedback we received from people viewing them from Facebook.
Monday, 1 February 2010
Episode Three - Script
Here is the script that James wrote for episode three.
"pier: why are you always getting at me? your always around me. where is the pen? vince! (pause) your always, like getting at me. i just cant stand it, the one time..
sonny: (interrupts) well think of a desent plan then and i'll stop getting at you.
pier: i just cant think of a plan, like, what the hell. (looks at keith)
sonny: you are such a vegetarian
shot of keith looking really 'out of it'. sonny and pier stare at him unable to figure out whats up with him. vince goes to see if he's okay.
vince: what seems to be the matter keith?
keith: i have eaten a rare amasoneon coffee bean. (sticks head up while talking and then continues looking around the room)
vince: aah, i see where you're going
shot of vince is from keiths perspective. everythings colourful and morphing.
sonny: what are you two talking about?
pier: yea, what are you two talking about?
vince and keith are talking in gibberish and sonny and pier can't make out what their saying.
sonny: am i missing something here?
pier and sonny look confused at eachother and then continue looking at vince and keith. damien walks through the door
damien: alright guys
keith: aah, cheif. (rubs face paint on his face to look like a red indian. the face paint magically appears with no explanation of why its there) get this spirit out of me
the next shot is of damien but he looks like cheif from 'one flew over the kookoos nest'
fade out
the next scene is where everyone is forming a vitual around keith. keith is lying on the table in the middle of the class chanting something. damien transorms into cheif again. pier is sitting on a table with sonny lying on him.
pier: sonny, do you remember the other day, when, when we were locked in the classroom and i tried to get out the door. and you.
sonny: i smashed your head, i smashed your head
pier: you smashed my head
sonny and pier laugh histerically
next scene everyone is dancing round keith like it's an actual ritual. all the characters have changed their appearance slightly. clothes torn and swapping clothes etc.
after a while a teacher walks in the door looking worried
teacher: oh my god, are you alright, i can't believe you're still alive.
everyone stops dancing and everyone looks normal again though their appearance is the same. basically, they look a mess.
teacher: there's been a massive gas leak
everyone collapses due to the gas they've been breathing in.
fade out"
"pier: why are you always getting at me? your always around me. where is the pen? vince! (pause) your always, like getting at me. i just cant stand it, the one time..
sonny: (interrupts) well think of a desent plan then and i'll stop getting at you.
pier: i just cant think of a plan, like, what the hell. (looks at keith)
sonny: you are such a vegetarian
shot of keith looking really 'out of it'. sonny and pier stare at him unable to figure out whats up with him. vince goes to see if he's okay.
vince: what seems to be the matter keith?
keith: i have eaten a rare amasoneon coffee bean. (sticks head up while talking and then continues looking around the room)
vince: aah, i see where you're going
shot of vince is from keiths perspective. everythings colourful and morphing.
sonny: what are you two talking about?
pier: yea, what are you two talking about?
vince and keith are talking in gibberish and sonny and pier can't make out what their saying.
sonny: am i missing something here?
pier and sonny look confused at eachother and then continue looking at vince and keith. damien walks through the door
damien: alright guys
keith: aah, cheif. (rubs face paint on his face to look like a red indian. the face paint magically appears with no explanation of why its there) get this spirit out of me
the next shot is of damien but he looks like cheif from 'one flew over the kookoos nest'
fade out
the next scene is where everyone is forming a vitual around keith. keith is lying on the table in the middle of the class chanting something. damien transorms into cheif again. pier is sitting on a table with sonny lying on him.
pier: sonny, do you remember the other day, when, when we were locked in the classroom and i tried to get out the door. and you.
sonny: i smashed your head, i smashed your head
pier: you smashed my head
sonny and pier laugh histerically
next scene everyone is dancing round keith like it's an actual ritual. all the characters have changed their appearance slightly. clothes torn and swapping clothes etc.
after a while a teacher walks in the door looking worried
teacher: oh my god, are you alright, i can't believe you're still alive.
everyone stops dancing and everyone looks normal again though their appearance is the same. basically, they look a mess.
teacher: there's been a massive gas leak
everyone collapses due to the gas they've been breathing in.
fade out"
Sunday, 31 January 2010
Action Plan for Monday
This should be a busy day for us as we need to get a lot done within quite a short day. Our next deadline is on Tuesday so we will be needing to get forms, shooting, editing and possibly uploading all done in that day. It will be a challenge but I think that if we have a brief meeting at the beginning of the day, that we will be able to assign roles for the day, deadlines and make sure that everyone is working really hard.
Forms will need to be made for using equipment and shooting and signed by Nick/Pete (My role)
Shooting will then need to commence promptly (actors and Loz on camera and myself on sound)
Editing will need to be started and hopefully finished (we will assign this role at the start of the day, as it has been changed for each episode)
We will also need someone uploading the video and promoting the episode (editors will be uploading the video and anyone can promote the episode but I will mainly be doing this on our deadline when we air the episode, linknig it to Facebook etc)
Forms will need to be made for using equipment and shooting and signed by Nick/Pete (My role)
Shooting will then need to commence promptly (actors and Loz on camera and myself on sound)
Editing will need to be started and hopefully finished (we will assign this role at the start of the day, as it has been changed for each episode)
We will also need someone uploading the video and promoting the episode (editors will be uploading the video and anyone can promote the episode but I will mainly be doing this on our deadline when we air the episode, linknig it to Facebook etc)
Self Assessment of Second Episode Production
Overall this second episode has gone a lot better than the first episode. We have taken into account the changes that CRaM wanted us to change, so we have managed to get rid of any inappropriate language and stick to using non-offensive words if we feel the need for impact. However, they wanted us to keep the episode itself down to one minute and thirty seconds, this was not accomplished. We have made the second episode just over four minutes long and this is shorter than the first episode, which is good but considerable more than we were allowed. I this was because the script that was written was far too detailed and not many members of the group wanted to change anything, therefore there was more footage to shoot and then too much footage to get down to such a short time. For our next episode, we will be trying to improve the time again and as we have a shorter time to shoot than before, we should have less footage which may make it easier for us to cut down the time.
This time around I also thought that our script was better constructed and it included a lot more humour that a wider audience would find funny. This made the viewing experience a lot more understandable and it was easier to get to grips with what was going on throughout the episode.
As I was watching the episode, I had noticed that our camera man(Loz), used a few new camera shots and he used a lot more wider shots to view more characters. These worked really well and helped to set the scene and explain the story visually.
The editing this time round was a lot better. There were no unneeded effects or zooms and everything was cut in the right places to make sense throughout. However, I thought that the sound still need tweaking as in some places it cuts out when no one is talking and it doesn't run smoothly. I think that this may be helped if I were there for that shoot (as I am working with most of the sound for the episodes), to listen to the sound while the camera man works so more attention can looked on for the sound. I was able to be present for one of shoots and I listened to sound and it went really well but we decided not to use that footage as we changed rooms which were filming in. I think it can also be helped by the editors, as they need cut it a lot more smoothly and pay more attention to the sound of footage. I think that I will make sure I pick up my role within sound a lot more so that I can over see the editors and make sure the sound is a lot better for the third episode.
The marketing that I have been helping out with has come a long way since the beginning of the project and we have been paying more attention to promoting the series than we were to begin with. I have been spending a lot of time at the end of editing, linking the uploaded videos from Vimeo and YouTube so they now appear on Facebook for all the fans to view and comment. I have been posting little messages with them and also updates of when more videos will be on he site. Many of the other members of the group have updating it too, with news of how the production is going and of any delays or progress. This has really helped to get more views or our video but I think that we can a lot more with the marketing to help get more people involved. I have noticed that the other group have started to make posters to advertise when their episode will be shown and I think that this may help us a lot. If we were able to pin up posters around the college, we would be targeting our audience and also notifying a lot more people of that we exist. We may have a lot of fans on our page but we do not get many of them actually viewing the videos so if we could get others interested in a different form then we could get more views.
Finally, my main role as production manager has gone quite well as I am starting to get quite used to the forms that I need to produce and I am getting done promptly for the shoot that we need them for. I have been receiving some late requests for the forms but it hasn't been too much of an issue as we have had the time but I think that when it comes to Monday we will have a small amount of time and we may be rushed. I shall have to make sure that I am not making any stupid mistakes with the form, spellings or dates incorrect so that the forms can be signed and approved as soon as possible.
This time around I also thought that our script was better constructed and it included a lot more humour that a wider audience would find funny. This made the viewing experience a lot more understandable and it was easier to get to grips with what was going on throughout the episode.
As I was watching the episode, I had noticed that our camera man(Loz), used a few new camera shots and he used a lot more wider shots to view more characters. These worked really well and helped to set the scene and explain the story visually.
The editing this time round was a lot better. There were no unneeded effects or zooms and everything was cut in the right places to make sense throughout. However, I thought that the sound still need tweaking as in some places it cuts out when no one is talking and it doesn't run smoothly. I think that this may be helped if I were there for that shoot (as I am working with most of the sound for the episodes), to listen to the sound while the camera man works so more attention can looked on for the sound. I was able to be present for one of shoots and I listened to sound and it went really well but we decided not to use that footage as we changed rooms which were filming in. I think it can also be helped by the editors, as they need cut it a lot more smoothly and pay more attention to the sound of footage. I think that I will make sure I pick up my role within sound a lot more so that I can over see the editors and make sure the sound is a lot better for the third episode.
The marketing that I have been helping out with has come a long way since the beginning of the project and we have been paying more attention to promoting the series than we were to begin with. I have been spending a lot of time at the end of editing, linking the uploaded videos from Vimeo and YouTube so they now appear on Facebook for all the fans to view and comment. I have been posting little messages with them and also updates of when more videos will be on he site. Many of the other members of the group have updating it too, with news of how the production is going and of any delays or progress. This has really helped to get more views or our video but I think that we can a lot more with the marketing to help get more people involved. I have noticed that the other group have started to make posters to advertise when their episode will be shown and I think that this may help us a lot. If we were able to pin up posters around the college, we would be targeting our audience and also notifying a lot more people of that we exist. We may have a lot of fans on our page but we do not get many of them actually viewing the videos so if we could get others interested in a different form then we could get more views.
Finally, my main role as production manager has gone quite well as I am starting to get quite used to the forms that I need to produce and I am getting done promptly for the shoot that we need them for. I have been receiving some late requests for the forms but it hasn't been too much of an issue as we have had the time but I think that when it comes to Monday we will have a small amount of time and we may be rushed. I shall have to make sure that I am not making any stupid mistakes with the form, spellings or dates incorrect so that the forms can be signed and approved as soon as possible.
Friday, 29 January 2010
Facebook - Marketing
As part of marketing we have to advise our videos on social networking sites such as Facebook, so I have been linking some of the videos from Youtube or Vimeo to our fan page on Facebook. This will let our fans and others who want to watch, to see all of our progress, updates and all the videos that we produce. This is a screen grab from me linking the second episode and the trailer for the third episode, to Facebook.
Teaser Trailer - Friendly Competition Humour
Here is the teaser trailer that our group made yesterday, for episode three. It doesn't give a lot of an insight to the next episode but the humour based on our apposing team works well.
Episode Two
Here is the video for episode two of Detention Deficit. I think that this episode is a lot better than the first. A lot has been altered from the first episode, to improve and it works a lot better. The shoot went really well and the editing was almost done on the same day, so it was really good progress.
Episode Two - Script
Here is the script that James wrote for our second episode.
"starts off with everyone sitting down at their desks, sonny starts talking to keith
sonny: keith. we’ve been sitting here for 15 minutes now. why haven’t you annoyed me yet?
keith: (looks frustrated with sonny) I'm pacing myself
sonny: so, you’re going to annoy me in a little while instead
keith: no. you ignoranus
sonny: (laughs)
vince and valerie start talking over sonny laughing
vince: what did you call him?
valerie: ignoranus, what the hell have you been smoking in your crack pipe.
sonny: crack (continues laughing)
pier: guys, i’ve nailed it. i have nailed it (bangs book on desk)
keith: sorry, but am i going completely mad? (raises voice)
valerie: going?
sonny: you’ve been a patient at the fucking luni-bin for a while mate
keith: can i just explain how im pacing my. fucking self
sonny: well, it happens
pier: what
sonny: he’s annoying me again
keith: fuck you guys
pause for a while
vince: enlighten me keith
keith: i’ve left my redbull outside the door. so i’m only allowed some every 30 minutes. it should help me sleep. hence, why i’m pacing myself.
everyone stares at him
vince: you didn’t enlighten me
chris: really. (everyone stares) how’s it working out for you. that’s a good idea. good little system. pacing yourself. i do the same for when i play guitar. i don’t want to overwork myself, you know.
everyone continues staring, silence
sonny: who. the. fuck. are you? (shocked face)
chris: i’m chris, pleased to meet you
valerie: why are you in detention then, did you kiss the teachers arse too much
pier: you do seem the type that would stay out, if i’m honest
chris: i chewed gum in class.
vince: i’ve seen things you wouldn’t believe
pause
sonny: wrong moment vince
vince: sorry
pier: (speaking to chris) is that all
chris: yeh, nothing really bad. why you in detention then?
pier: if i told you, i’d have to kill you
fade out
keith and chris are sitting together
keith: thanks for thinking my idea was good by the way. these guys don’t appreciate me.
chris: that’s alright. actually. it’s half past now. you want me to go get your red bull from outside?
keith: (excited voice, slightly nagging) oh yes please. that’d be great. (laughs) if i didn’t have that. i’d probably los the plot. have an axiety attack or something.
chris: that’s okay, i’ll go get it
chris goes to open door, but it doesn’t open
chris: uh, guys. the door isn’t opening
keith: what! (loud, going out of control)
keith starts having an axiety attack, shaking his shoulders. sonny walks up to him and punches him in the face. he falls onto his chair.
sonny: i am not going through that shit again
valerie: the less of that the better
sonny: don’t talk to me
valerie: screw you sonny
chris: what the hell is wrong with you?
sonny: trust me, you’ll thank me later
vince: he is a crazy, moonstruck hound junkie. he needs to be controlled
pier: (talks to chris) did you say the doors locked?
chris: why else would hound junkie have gone fucking mental
sonny: you’re learning
pier: so, i’m trapped here? (looks worried)
chris: yes. we all are
sonny: that’s alright, pier will think of a plan
pier: (awkward laugh) yeh. sure. i’ll think of something
valerie: what. is your mind blank?
vince: what about your amazing idea earlier
pier: i’ll think of another one. that plan isn’t well suited for this type of escape
sonny: type of escape...(interrupts)
pier: stay the fuck out of this sonny. i’ll think of a plan. just give me a minute to gather my thoughts.
fade out.
fades in - 20 minutes later
chris: it’s been ages. a teacher hasn’t even come and checked up on us.
sonny: they don’t. teachers. they’re quite happy to just leave us here to rot. we’re trash to them. we’re the ones who fuck the system. and when your in here, your trash too.
chris: i’m not trash, i’m a good student.
valerie: no your not. you’re a fucking criminal.
vince: i don’t see what’s so special about rugby balls anyway. wilson this and wilson that. basket balls are better. i could have a good conversation with a basket ball
everyone looks over at vince
chris: what are you talking about?
vince: when we’ve been driven to madness. i wanna know who my best friend will be
chris: and you chose a basket ball?
vince: yeh
sonny: suppose they got a nice tan. just don’t impregnate it, might have loadsa golf balls rolling about.
vince: you don’t understand. you’re not ready for the truth
chris: i need to get out of here, any plan yet?
pier: i can’t think. i’m lost. i’m lost.( hangs his head in shame, crying)
sonny: every single fucking day, you think of a plan to escape. every. single, fucking day. are you telling me that the one day we need to a plan, you can’t think of one?
pier: i’m sorry (wails) i’m lost
sonny: you can do it, think
pier: i can’t
sonny: yes you can. ( stands up and grabs piers head) use your head!
rams piers head into the door
valerie: great. now what?
chris: we’re trapped
sonny: fuck sake, stand back, i’ll get the door open
sonny kicks the door really hard, nothing happens
chris: we’re screwed.
pier: (wakes back up) uh, what happened
sonny: call a doctor
pier: sonny, i’m fine, just got a fucking bad headache.
chris: not surprised ( murmurs)
sonny: not for you dipshit
valerie/chris: who
sonny: for me. i think i’ve just broken my leg
end credits"
"starts off with everyone sitting down at their desks, sonny starts talking to keith
sonny: keith. we’ve been sitting here for 15 minutes now. why haven’t you annoyed me yet?
keith: (looks frustrated with sonny) I'm pacing myself
sonny: so, you’re going to annoy me in a little while instead
keith: no. you ignoranus
sonny: (laughs)
vince and valerie start talking over sonny laughing
vince: what did you call him?
valerie: ignoranus, what the hell have you been smoking in your crack pipe.
sonny: crack (continues laughing)
pier: guys, i’ve nailed it. i have nailed it (bangs book on desk)
keith: sorry, but am i going completely mad? (raises voice)
valerie: going?
sonny: you’ve been a patient at the fucking luni-bin for a while mate
keith: can i just explain how im pacing my. fucking self
sonny: well, it happens
pier: what
sonny: he’s annoying me again
keith: fuck you guys
pause for a while
vince: enlighten me keith
keith: i’ve left my redbull outside the door. so i’m only allowed some every 30 minutes. it should help me sleep. hence, why i’m pacing myself.
everyone stares at him
vince: you didn’t enlighten me
chris: really. (everyone stares) how’s it working out for you. that’s a good idea. good little system. pacing yourself. i do the same for when i play guitar. i don’t want to overwork myself, you know.
everyone continues staring, silence
sonny: who. the. fuck. are you? (shocked face)
chris: i’m chris, pleased to meet you
valerie: why are you in detention then, did you kiss the teachers arse too much
pier: you do seem the type that would stay out, if i’m honest
chris: i chewed gum in class.
vince: i’ve seen things you wouldn’t believe
pause
sonny: wrong moment vince
vince: sorry
pier: (speaking to chris) is that all
chris: yeh, nothing really bad. why you in detention then?
pier: if i told you, i’d have to kill you
fade out
keith and chris are sitting together
keith: thanks for thinking my idea was good by the way. these guys don’t appreciate me.
chris: that’s alright. actually. it’s half past now. you want me to go get your red bull from outside?
keith: (excited voice, slightly nagging) oh yes please. that’d be great. (laughs) if i didn’t have that. i’d probably los the plot. have an axiety attack or something.
chris: that’s okay, i’ll go get it
chris goes to open door, but it doesn’t open
chris: uh, guys. the door isn’t opening
keith: what! (loud, going out of control)
keith starts having an axiety attack, shaking his shoulders. sonny walks up to him and punches him in the face. he falls onto his chair.
sonny: i am not going through that shit again
valerie: the less of that the better
sonny: don’t talk to me
valerie: screw you sonny
chris: what the hell is wrong with you?
sonny: trust me, you’ll thank me later
vince: he is a crazy, moonstruck hound junkie. he needs to be controlled
pier: (talks to chris) did you say the doors locked?
chris: why else would hound junkie have gone fucking mental
sonny: you’re learning
pier: so, i’m trapped here? (looks worried)
chris: yes. we all are
sonny: that’s alright, pier will think of a plan
pier: (awkward laugh) yeh. sure. i’ll think of something
valerie: what. is your mind blank?
vince: what about your amazing idea earlier
pier: i’ll think of another one. that plan isn’t well suited for this type of escape
sonny: type of escape...(interrupts)
pier: stay the fuck out of this sonny. i’ll think of a plan. just give me a minute to gather my thoughts.
fade out.
fades in - 20 minutes later
chris: it’s been ages. a teacher hasn’t even come and checked up on us.
sonny: they don’t. teachers. they’re quite happy to just leave us here to rot. we’re trash to them. we’re the ones who fuck the system. and when your in here, your trash too.
chris: i’m not trash, i’m a good student.
valerie: no your not. you’re a fucking criminal.
vince: i don’t see what’s so special about rugby balls anyway. wilson this and wilson that. basket balls are better. i could have a good conversation with a basket ball
everyone looks over at vince
chris: what are you talking about?
vince: when we’ve been driven to madness. i wanna know who my best friend will be
chris: and you chose a basket ball?
vince: yeh
sonny: suppose they got a nice tan. just don’t impregnate it, might have loadsa golf balls rolling about.
vince: you don’t understand. you’re not ready for the truth
chris: i need to get out of here, any plan yet?
pier: i can’t think. i’m lost. i’m lost.( hangs his head in shame, crying)
sonny: every single fucking day, you think of a plan to escape. every. single, fucking day. are you telling me that the one day we need to a plan, you can’t think of one?
pier: i’m sorry (wails) i’m lost
sonny: you can do it, think
pier: i can’t
sonny: yes you can. ( stands up and grabs piers head) use your head!
rams piers head into the door
valerie: great. now what?
chris: we’re trapped
sonny: fuck sake, stand back, i’ll get the door open
sonny kicks the door really hard, nothing happens
chris: we’re screwed.
pier: (wakes back up) uh, what happened
sonny: call a doctor
pier: sonny, i’m fine, just got a fucking bad headache.
chris: not surprised ( murmurs)
sonny: not for you dipshit
valerie/chris: who
sonny: for me. i think i’ve just broken my leg
end credits"
Thursday, 28 January 2010
YouTube Account
As we have only got a Vimeo account to post all of our videos on to, we have been advised to make a YouTube account. This will be useful for us because YouTube is very popular with the younger generation, who are trying to target and therefore we may managed to get more views of our episodes, trailers and bloopers. Below is a screen grab of our YouTube account and we have started to post a few videos on there.
Wednesday, 27 January 2010
Action Plan For Today
As we have a short amount of lesson time, as we had an exam, we have decided to rehearse the lines. We are going to rehearse with the actors that we have in our group today and we will run the script by the other actor not within the group.
Form For Thursday 28th Shoot
Here are the forms for the shoot that I made for the shoot that we wanted to do for Thursday the 28th of January. This shoot was to shoot the footage of our second episode of Detention Deficit. The first image is of the permission letter that I wrote for using the equipment and the last two images are of the risk assessment that we needed to have for the shoot.
Tuesday, 26 January 2010
Feedback From Episode One
We have gathered some feedback from the other group, for our first episode. We all commented on our own episode but then also on the other groups. Below are the main points of criticism that we received from others and some of them appeared more than once I have put numbers next to them to symbolize this.
The clock shot is too long and becomes boring (x10)
College's don't normally hold detention in a computer room
At the beginning the sound isn't very good but improves as episode goes on (x3)
The bleeping of the swear words gets annoying
Shouldn't really have any swearing - not needed (x12)
Some acting is over acted and unnecessary, however, one actor is enthusiastic
We will be working on all these points to improve our next episode. There will be no swearing in the next episode and we will be having rehearsals. We will also keep an eye on the sound to make sure that it is consitantly good quality and we will take into account that are shots may need to be quicker and a lot clearer to explain to the audience.
The clock shot is too long and becomes boring (x10)
College's don't normally hold detention in a computer room
At the beginning the sound isn't very good but improves as episode goes on (x3)
The bleeping of the swear words gets annoying
Shouldn't really have any swearing - not needed (x12)
Some acting is over acted and unnecessary, however, one actor is enthusiastic
We will be working on all these points to improve our next episode. There will be no swearing in the next episode and we will be having rehearsals. We will also keep an eye on the sound to make sure that it is consitantly good quality and we will take into account that are shots may need to be quicker and a lot clearer to explain to the audience.
Monday, 25 January 2010
Facebook Event
For our second episode, as our first wasn't a big hit, I decided to make an event on Facebook. These are pages were you tell people of an event that is going on, use links, names of the event and you can invite people to join the page and accept to coming to the event. We made the airing of the second episode an event, so I wrote a little something about the event, put a date on it, picture and then invited anyone who would be interested. Below is a screen grab of the event page that I created.
Teaser Trailer For Episode Two
Here is the episode that we made for to advertise the second episode.
Saturday, 23 January 2010
Role Throughout Production and Improving Next Episode
My role in the beginning of the production was sound supervisor and working with some of marketing of the series. I was in-charge of the music for each episode and from the very start the group knew what they wanted and I had to go find it. I found the tracks that we wanted but they needed to be cut down so I needed to email the artists and ask permission to whether I could use their track and cut it down for out episodes. I thought that the best way to find the bands was to us MySpace and then find a free download and cut it down from there. After I downloaded them I would then put them into Garageband, cut them down and then export them as an mp3, ready to be given to the editor.
As for my other role as assistant with the marketing, someone else started off making all of the others sites so I no longer needed that role. However, throughout the whole production I have worked with the Facebook account to promote the series and get fans to become interested and want to continue to watch.
I managed to pick up a new role as the project started to develop. We had discovered that we had missed out a major role of the production and that we needed to assign it or we would get nothing finished. I took up this role and it was production manger. This role consisted of making all of the forms for the production, such as, permission slips, model release forms and risk assessments. This role I have kept all the way through the production of the first episode and I think that I really want to carry on with the role for the next episode. It takes plenty of patience to complete all of forms and especially as our group wanted to do many shoots and borrow a lot equipment. I think that I have completed this role really well and I think that the group has appreciated me doing it.
It is now coming close to the airing of the second episode, as we need to have it uploaded on Tuesday. I think that we have a lot to organize and there are certain things that we need to complete before we can even think that we have it done in time. We have not yet planned our next shoot, as other members of the group have mentioned that some of our actors can not be available. This is a big issue because we only have one day to shoot and if we do not finish the shoot by Tuesday, we will not have enough footage to edit and therefore deadline will be missed again. I think that we could solve this by trying to get these actors in any brakes they have, make the forms and make sure that we work hard and get the footage that we need. I think that biggest issue that we will have is that we are not very organized and this has really let down our first episode. We need to have more meetings so that everyone knows exactly what is going on, who is doing what and when the deadlines are for these tasks. We need to organize when we want equipment, well in advance and make sure that we give equipment to reliable people. This will help the shoots go a lot smoother and help to give people plenty of notice. I think that another good thing for us to do is to make sure that we know exactly what content we can have and knowing where it will be viewed, that we have the appropriate content. For example, no swearing as it will be shown to a public audience.
The best thing that our group can do to make sure that we meet the deadline, is to be a lot more organized and in doing so then make sure that these task are fully completed, rather than having a calm attitude that time can be wasted.
As for my other role as assistant with the marketing, someone else started off making all of the others sites so I no longer needed that role. However, throughout the whole production I have worked with the Facebook account to promote the series and get fans to become interested and want to continue to watch.
I managed to pick up a new role as the project started to develop. We had discovered that we had missed out a major role of the production and that we needed to assign it or we would get nothing finished. I took up this role and it was production manger. This role consisted of making all of the forms for the production, such as, permission slips, model release forms and risk assessments. This role I have kept all the way through the production of the first episode and I think that I really want to carry on with the role for the next episode. It takes plenty of patience to complete all of forms and especially as our group wanted to do many shoots and borrow a lot equipment. I think that I have completed this role really well and I think that the group has appreciated me doing it.
It is now coming close to the airing of the second episode, as we need to have it uploaded on Tuesday. I think that we have a lot to organize and there are certain things that we need to complete before we can even think that we have it done in time. We have not yet planned our next shoot, as other members of the group have mentioned that some of our actors can not be available. This is a big issue because we only have one day to shoot and if we do not finish the shoot by Tuesday, we will not have enough footage to edit and therefore deadline will be missed again. I think that we could solve this by trying to get these actors in any brakes they have, make the forms and make sure that we work hard and get the footage that we need. I think that biggest issue that we will have is that we are not very organized and this has really let down our first episode. We need to have more meetings so that everyone knows exactly what is going on, who is doing what and when the deadlines are for these tasks. We need to organize when we want equipment, well in advance and make sure that we give equipment to reliable people. This will help the shoots go a lot smoother and help to give people plenty of notice. I think that another good thing for us to do is to make sure that we know exactly what content we can have and knowing where it will be viewed, that we have the appropriate content. For example, no swearing as it will be shown to a public audience.
The best thing that our group can do to make sure that we meet the deadline, is to be a lot more organized and in doing so then make sure that these task are fully completed, rather than having a calm attitude that time can be wasted.
Friday, 22 January 2010
First Episode of Detention Deficit
Here is the video of our first episode of Detention Deficit. I think that it has turned out quite well considering we have had a lot of ups and downs throughout this project.
Detention Deficit: Episode ONE from Detention Deficit on Vimeo.
January 22th - Work and Finishing First Episode
Today was our deadline for uploading our first episode and we spent all of our lessons today editing the final version and uploading it to Vimeo. My task for the day was to promote the airing of the first episode on Facebook and to also send emails to the bands songs that we have used and to let them know of the first episode and have access to links.
I also spent some of my time over-looking the editing and watching how it progressed throughout the afternoon. We worked quite hard this afternoon and I think that we have done quite well considering all the problems that we have faced. We did not managed to meet the deadline at the end of the lesson but it was uploaded by 7 for viewing. I think that if we were much more organised, we may have made the deadline a lot easier and the outcome would also be of better quality.
I also spent some of my time over-looking the editing and watching how it progressed throughout the afternoon. We worked quite hard this afternoon and I think that we have done quite well considering all the problems that we have faced. We did not managed to meet the deadline at the end of the lesson but it was uploaded by 7 for viewing. I think that if we were much more organised, we may have made the deadline a lot easier and the outcome would also be of better quality.
Thursday, 21 January 2010
January 21st - Meeting and Work
Today has been very successful, considering that we didn't have a lot of time to shoot. I started by helping to shoot the second episode and worked with the boom mic of the shoot. I then went on to updating our status on Facebook to promote the airing of the first episode. My final task of the day was to complete editing the blooper reel and then to upload it to Vimeo. I have completed this but I still need to upload it to Vimeo so others can view it.
We have to complete a lot of things before we air the episodes on Tuesday. We have to bleep out the swearing in the episodes and also any other footage that we have created such as the bloopers. We also need to shoot the second episode, I need to write forms for it and bloopers shall be made from this too. I need to post a lot more statuses of Facebook to promote the airing and I also need to get one more model release form signed.
We have to complete a lot of things before we air the episodes on Tuesday. We have to bleep out the swearing in the episodes and also any other footage that we have created such as the bloopers. We also need to shoot the second episode, I need to write forms for it and bloopers shall be made from this too. I need to post a lot more statuses of Facebook to promote the airing and I also need to get one more model release form signed.
Wednesday, 20 January 2010
January 20th - Work
Today we didn't have much of a meeting but we all working on completing out action plan for today. My action plan was to make some forms for the next shoot that we are going to be doing, make sure that the model release forms are signed and also to take some pictures of the group editing. I have managed to get everyone but one actor to sign the model release forms and I have also managed to produce the forms for the next shoot. I didn't need to take pictures in the end, as James had already taken some but I found another task to get on with. We needed another piece of music downloaded and cut down so I worked on this and then gave it to Matt H for titles.
As for the rest of the group, they all managed to get a lot of editing done, whether it was for the main episode, the bloopers or the titles and credits.
As for the rest of the group, they all managed to get a lot of editing done, whether it was for the main episode, the bloopers or the titles and credits.
Letter From CRaM Creative
We have received a letter from CRaM Creatives, as they are sponsoring us, they had a few points which they wanted to mention and things they wanted to change. They are interested in showing our episodes at the Junction and on their own professional web TV channel. Therefore, they will want the episodes to not include any offensive language. We will need to bleep them out of the episode we have already shot and then make sure that any other episodes that we make, that they don't have offensive language in.
They also wanted us to mention them in the credits and animated there logo for it to appear at the end. We have been working on all of this and it is coming along well.
They also wanted us to mention them in the credits and animated there logo for it to appear at the end. We have been working on all of this and it is coming along well.
Tuesday, 19 January 2010
Plan For Wednesday 20th
Tomorrow(wednesday 20th) I am planning or working the music for the sound track for the series. I need to find the track which I cut on garageband and give it to Matt H or who ever is doing the title sequence tomorrow. I also need to discuss with the group to whether they want the other track, as I am having trouble finding a free download so I may not be able to cut it down or use it for the series. If I do managed to get it and cut it down, I will also have to give that to Matt H.
My next task will be to start making some forms for our next shoot, for the next episode and also to make sure that all of the model release forms are signed ready. I think that my last task will be to take some pictures of the group editing the first episode and putting it all together. These photos can be useful for Blogger and also to promote the series and get people interested.
Our whole group will mainly be working on editing. Matt H will be working on the title sequence, credit and I will also be working with him to give him the sound. James will be helping us all out with our work, making sure it gets done and also working on the next episode. Loz, Hayden and possibly Alex will be working on the editing all of the footage we have gathered for the first episode, cutting it and putting it together ready for uploading on Friday. I think that Joe can be working on the social networking sites and posting about all the editing and the how the episode is coming alone. I am not too sure that everyone will be doing all these things, like this, but this is what I think we need to get done and which people would be completing each task.
My next task will be to start making some forms for our next shoot, for the next episode and also to make sure that all of the model release forms are signed ready. I think that my last task will be to take some pictures of the group editing the first episode and putting it all together. These photos can be useful for Blogger and also to promote the series and get people interested.
Our whole group will mainly be working on editing. Matt H will be working on the title sequence, credit and I will also be working with him to give him the sound. James will be helping us all out with our work, making sure it gets done and also working on the next episode. Loz, Hayden and possibly Alex will be working on the editing all of the footage we have gathered for the first episode, cutting it and putting it together ready for uploading on Friday. I think that Joe can be working on the social networking sites and posting about all the editing and the how the episode is coming alone. I am not too sure that everyone will be doing all these things, like this, but this is what I think we need to get done and which people would be completing each task.
January 19th - Work
Today was a mixture of working on our show project and working on the Fiver project for the Junction. During the first session, in my group for the Fiver, we came up with ideas to brief to Simon about what we thought we would want the documentary to be like.
In the second session of the day we all worked on the show project. I needed to work on getting images of all the forms that we had produced so far and posting them on to my blog as evidence. i also had to make sure Alex made all of our model release forms and printed them off so we could get them signed. I managed to get all of these completed and now my next task is to make sure everyone who acted in the episodes to sign them.
In the second session of the day we all worked on the show project. I needed to work on getting images of all the forms that we had produced so far and posting them on to my blog as evidence. i also had to make sure Alex made all of our model release forms and printed them off so we could get them signed. I managed to get all of these completed and now my next task is to make sure everyone who acted in the episodes to sign them.
Monday, 18 January 2010
How My Role Has Changed
At the beginning of the project I was assigned the role of working with marketing and sound when editing started. As the project has progressed we have all helped others with their work and naturally changed roles slightly. Especially as a new role was introduced, we then had to assigned that to someone in the group. I am still working with the sound of the series, however, instead of working with the marketing and websites, I am now a production manager so I am now in charge of getting all forms and permissions made and signed. I think that this was a good role for me, as I don't normally like the paperwork side of things but I have really enjoyed this role and I have really taken it on seriously. Now I have had a taster of a different role I have never done before, I think that this could be possibility for me in the future.
January 18th - Meeting and Work
Today we had a brief meeting with the whole class to see at what point each group is at with the show project and Pete wanted to note when we all think that we would ready so he could make a deadline. We have been progressing quickly recently with our project and we are about to start planning the second episode and hoping to have the first episode uploaded by wednesday.
My tasks today were to print out the forms which are needed for us to shoot our last footage for the first episode, to download a track which we need and edit it in garageband and I have also needed to upload some evidence of what paperwork we have done to blogger. I managed to complete all of this, however I couldn't find the track to download so we will have to find another way to get hold of it.
My tasks today were to print out the forms which are needed for us to shoot our last footage for the first episode, to download a track which we need and edit it in garageband and I have also needed to upload some evidence of what paperwork we have done to blogger. I managed to complete all of this, however I couldn't find the track to download so we will have to find another way to get hold of it.
Production Forms For Shoot on Tuesday 19th
Here are some images of the risk assessment and the permission slip which I had to produce for our group to be able to shoot on Tuesday. First is the permission slip image and below that is the risk assessment image.
In order; First permission slip, second permission slip which has been corrected and then risk assessment.
In order; First permission slip, second permission slip which has been corrected and then risk assessment.
Self Assessment of Progress so Far
I think that I have kept up with tasks quite promptly and to good standards. Managing to post each day, meetings and the work that I have done each day, has been quite simple. The tasks that I have needed to get done for the production of the series as always been completed within in good time. However, I think that when posting my evidence I need to be efficient and getting it all completed on the day that we have cone it.
Our marketing has gone okay so far but it needs improvement. I was originally set the role of helping with the marketing and doing sound. Throughout the project this has changed so I still competed the sound but now I am production manager instead of helping with marketing. This means that I don't have much control over the websites. I think that they need a lot more posts each day and more interesting topics and updates.
I think scripting have gone really well. It has been written by James and completed really quickly. We are coming to the end of the first episode, production wise, and we already have a script for the second episode. Planning has progressed throughout our production because at the beginning we didn't remember to make the forms so this was bad planning. We now are working on planning the next episode so we are more than on track. As for shooting we are on time with this and we will finish today for the first episode. I haven't been present for our shoots for first episode but I haven't been present for our first shoots for the first episode but I have got a lot of feedback from the rest of the group.
We are right on schedule for the uploading our first episode for wednesday and I am currently working on planning and writing forms for the next episode.
Sunday, 17 January 2010
Shot List For Scene One of First Episode
Another piece of information that we need to complete was a shot list for each scene within our episode. When we had our meeting on Friday we chose who would complete each part of the forms that need to be done and we Hayden was given the task of making the shot list. Below is a type up of what he wrote.
1) very slow zoom out from Pier's eyes
2)very slow zoom in to clock
3)very slow zoom out from Keith rambling in Pier's ears
4)Keith and Pier, over the shoulder, Sonny in back ground
5)SAME SHOT
6)Sonny over the should shot at Keith and Pier
7)Sonny right medium close shot
8)Keith centre FPS shot
9)Keith left side pencil case enters and camera shake
10)Keith centre shot
11)Side shot Keith with Pier
12)Side shot of Pier
13)Centre shot of Sonny
14)Centre shot of Keith
1) very slow zoom out from Pier's eyes
2)very slow zoom in to clock
3)very slow zoom out from Keith rambling in Pier's ears
4)Keith and Pier, over the shoulder, Sonny in back ground
5)SAME SHOT
6)Sonny over the should shot at Keith and Pier
7)Sonny right medium close shot
8)Keith centre FPS shot
9)Keith left side pencil case enters and camera shake
10)Keith centre shot
11)Side shot Keith with Pier
12)Side shot of Pier
13)Centre shot of Sonny
14)Centre shot of Keith
Friday, 15 January 2010
January 15th - Meeting and Work
Today we had a brief meeting in our production group, we had to see what else was needed to get completed before we start to edit the first episode and we discovered that we were missing quite a lot of paperwork which we forgot about.
As I am production manager I decided to write down all the pieces of paper work and we then would work out would do which piece so that it would get completed quicker. Below is a list of what we needed to get done and who completed each.
Story board - Hayden
Shot list - Hayden
Model Release forms - Alex
Print out of emails to The Avalanches and Ending in ing - Philippa
Full updated version of the script printed out - Philippa
All of these were completed today so we are now ready to move on to finish a small bit of filming and then editing for the first episode.
Today we have also come up tasks that we need to get done by Monday, Wednesday and by the end of the week. I need to write model release forms, permission and risk assessment forms for Monday and by Wednesday I need to make sure that I have editing the sound track and uploaded it to MP3. By the end of the week I need to make sure that all of the paper work all correct and to start the next set of forms for the next episode so that we don't get behind.
As I am production manager I decided to write down all the pieces of paper work and we then would work out would do which piece so that it would get completed quicker. Below is a list of what we needed to get done and who completed each.
Story board - Hayden
Shot list - Hayden
Model Release forms - Alex
Print out of emails to The Avalanches and Ending in ing - Philippa
Full updated version of the script printed out - Philippa
All of these were completed today so we are now ready to move on to finish a small bit of filming and then editing for the first episode.
Today we have also come up tasks that we need to get done by Monday, Wednesday and by the end of the week. I need to write model release forms, permission and risk assessment forms for Monday and by Wednesday I need to make sure that I have editing the sound track and uploaded it to MP3. By the end of the week I need to make sure that all of the paper work all correct and to start the next set of forms for the next episode so that we don't get behind.
Teaser Trailer for First Episode
Here is the first teaser trailer, for our first episode.
Detention Deficit Teaser Trailer from Detention Deficit on Vimeo.
Thursday, 14 January 2010
Photos From First Shoot
Here are a few images of our first shoot for the first episode. I wasn't present for the shoot but the group said it went really well and you get a rough idea of what they did from the images below.
Production Forms For Our First Shoot - First Episode
Here are images of the forms that I created for the shoot of the first episode. I needed to produce a risk assessment of the shoot so the shoot would be as safe as possible. I also had to produced a permission letter so that we were able to use all of the equipment that we needed for the shoot. We also need model release forms for each of the actors in the shoot, however they still need to be given back by actors who have signed them and put in our folder.
Wednesday, 13 January 2010
Production Forms For Shoot on January 13th
Here are some images of the forms we needed to produce the sound for our trailer. We wanted to make a short trailer for our first episode and we had managed to get the footage but the sounded need to be completed correctly. In order; permission slip and the last two are images of the risk assessment.
January 13th - Planning The Day - Success?
I have been quite successful with my day and it has been very productive. I almost completed all of my tasks. I have completed, printed out and got signed all of the risk assessments and permissions that we need for the rest of the week. They were almost all done correctly but there was one mistake on one of the permissions which meant that it wasn't allowed and had to be written again.
I have also completed my second task, I have a reply from The Avalanches and they have let us sample their song. I have also managed to download the track and edit it in Garageband so it is now ready for putting on each of the episodes.
My final task of the day I personally did not complete, as we decided to only send one person to meet out new actor for Valarie. Loz decided to go meet her and see whether she is right for the part. Hopefully we should find out tomorrow whether we will use her within the micro-series.
I think today was a very productive day and I managed to get a lot more completed than I needed to.
I have also completed my second task, I have a reply from The Avalanches and they have let us sample their song. I have also managed to download the track and edit it in Garageband so it is now ready for putting on each of the episodes.
My final task of the day I personally did not complete, as we decided to only send one person to meet out new actor for Valarie. Loz decided to go meet her and see whether she is right for the part. Hopefully we should find out tomorrow whether we will use her within the micro-series.
I think today was a very productive day and I managed to get a lot more completed than I needed to.
Response from Ending In Ing
Our group wanted to used 25 seconds from one of 'Ending In Ing' songs to be played in the beginning credits of our micro-series. I decided to add them as a friend on MySpace and then send them a message asking whether it would be ok. We managed to get a friend acceptance within one day and I then sent them a message. They then replied to my message within another day days and they have said that it would be ok for us to sample it and that we should credit them in the ending credits.
Below is a screen shot of the messages that we sent and received from 'Ending In Ing'. We are also planning on sending them a link to the series, after we have finished, so that they can see how we have put in part of their track and credited them.
Below is the link to their MySpace page.
http://www.myspace.com/endingining1
Below is a screen shot of the messages that we sent and received from 'Ending In Ing'. We are also planning on sending them a link to the series, after we have finished, so that they can see how we have put in part of their track and credited them.
Below is the link to their MySpace page.
http://www.myspace.com/endingining1
The Avalanches - Frontier Psychiatrist
We have been given permission from 'The Avalanches' to sample 25 seconds of their song 'Frontier Psychiatrist'. Below is the video for the song that we are going to be using and we think that this will work really well with our episodes.
Response From The Avalanches
Our group wanted to used 25 seconds from one of 'The Avalanches' songs to be played in the ending credits of our micro-series. I decided to add them as a friend on MySpace and then send them a message asking whether it would be ok. We managed to get a friend acceptance in two days of adding them and I then sent them a message. They then replied to my message within another two days and they have said that it would be ok for us to sample it and that we should credit them in the ending credits.
Below is a link to their MySpace page.
http://www.myspace.com/theavalanches
Below is a screen shot of the messages that we sent and received from 'The Avalanches'. We are also planning on sending them a link to the series, after we have finished, so that they can see how we have put in part of their track and credited them.
(In order, a big picture of the whole thing, my message to them and their reply.)
Below is a link to their MySpace page.
http://www.myspace.com/theavalanches
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